Trapped! [[A TH fanfic I was writing on the old forum]]

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THIS STORY IS FICTION
But it is based on the Holocaust and World War 2
In memory of the 6 million Jewish people who died in the Holocaust.
To the survivors of this tragic event called the Holocaust,I have my deepest respect for you.
These 6 million victims did NOT deserve this treatment.


Ch.1-A Hard Day and a Trip to the past

The guys of Tokio Hotel were doing the usual interviews,concerts,getting hunt down by fan girls,yada yada yada.But the guys were stressed.So now they're in the limo on the way to their hotel.
"I am so tired"Bill said.
"I hear ya bro"Tom agreed.
"Ya I'm so glad we finally get to go back to the hotel to rest..."Georg stated.
"Ya"they said in unison.
Their limo pulled up at their hotel.
"Yes!"Bill said in excitement.
They all entered their hotel rooms.
Gustav was in his pj's listening to some music on his mp3 player.
Georg was just sitting on his bed thinking about tomorrow's agonizing schedule.
Tom took a shower and was in his pj's
messing with his guitar before he went to bed.
Bill is laying on his bed staring at the ceiling just thinking about life in general.
He was really stressed.He loved his career in music but sometimes he just wanted to get away
from all the craziness.But he was getting tired and he decided that it was time for him to hit the hay.
Bill took out his cell phone and texted
'Guten nacht' to Tom,Georg,and Gustav.
'Yeah we're all going to bed since we're going to have a long day tomorrow ' Tom replied in another text message.
All the four boys drifted off into deep sleep.
The boys woke up.All four of them were lying down in a dark alleyway.
"Were are we???"Bill asked a bit confused.
"I don't know Bill....."Tom answered.
"Why are we wearing these discusting Nazi uniforms?"Georg asked.
Gustav picked up a crumbled news paper lying beside him.
"Oh my gosh ......According to this news paper...We're in 1942 and we're in Berlin"Gustav said in total shock.
"Oh my god...."Bill said quietly



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Ch.2-Helena and the Concentration Camps

The boys walked out of the alley way.
Bill,Tom,and Georg notice that their hair wasn't long any more it was cut really short.
They saw a line a Nazis marching by and one of the soldiers said"join the line."They did so because they knew if they didn't they would get killed.They were marching in the line.The soldiers were marching one by one perfectly,their feet were aligned perfectly they all stepped with the same foot they all had their guns held in the same hand each gun pointing up straight.
"HALT!"the leader yelled.
"All of you are going to be sent of to Auschwitz in Poland to work there of you who object will be killed.Is that clear!"All the soldiers knew that it wasn't a question.
They all were sent off to Auschwitz.

Here we have a girl name Helena who was 18 years old and she was staying in Auschwitz.Helena was in her barrack laying down on a hard wooden bunk with no mattress no pillow no blankets the only thing she had was her arm to rest her head on.Helena was Jewish which means she had
a yellow patch in the shape of the Star of David over her heart area that said 'Jude' on it which means "Jew" in German.Her father died of a disease while living in the Ghettos.
She used to have beautiful brunette wavy hair but now its shaved off and it was very short and she had a yellow stripe painted down her back.Her hazel eyes gleamed in the moonlight.Helena was very thin because the soldiers were hardly feeding them food and when she got a chance to have food she would give most of it to the children.By each passing day their treatment became worse.
Her older brother was shot because he refused to put people in the crematorium.Her mother was burnt in the crematorium with her sister.She had no family left it was only her.
"What did we do to ever deserve this?"she whispered to herself as tears started to slide down her cheek.
"Why did I have to be Jewish?"
"Don't say that!"A old woman who was laying down next to her whispered harshly.
"You should be proud of being Jewish....No matter WHAT!"the woman said.
"I know you are right...But I feel like this time of hardship will never end!"
The woman embraced her.
"I know....We don't deserve this....You still have a Whole life ahead of you and I know that you are scared of the troubles that might some tomorrow but all you need to worry about is now"the woman said passionately.
"Thank you.Your word are very wise and full of wisdom.What is your name??"Helena said.
"My name is Paula and yours my dear??"Paula asked."My name is Helena"she replied.
"What a beautiful name"the old woman complemented.
"Thank you Paula.Well good night."
"Good night Helena."

[[Middle of the night]]
Helena heard guns firing she knew that the soldiers just came from the bar and at that moment she new that the soldiers were going to play one of their "games".
She hoped that they wouldn't go into her barrack.
The soldiers were drunk and they broke into the barrack that was right next door to hers.
She heard people running,guns firing, and children and women screaming.Her lip began to quiver and she began to cry the salty tears stung the cuts that she had on her face.The soldiers left and I guess they were going back to the bar.
That night she did the same thing she has done many nights.....Cry herself back to sleep.

The 4 boys arrived at Auschwitz in the morning....
"Oh my god....."they all said in shock.
"Why do we have to work here???"Bill questioned.
"Remember we're in the 1940's which mean we are in the Holocaust which means that.........We have to work in a concentration camp...."Gustav said as he began to frown.
"Do we have to???"Tom asked.
"Yeah we do or else we will be killed"Georg answered Tom's question.
"Then we will treat the prisoners kindly but as you know we're going to have to do it secretly..."Bill said very quietly that way no one else could hear him.
Before they entered with the rest of the soldiers on the front of the concentration camp entrance it said "Arbeit Macht Frei"
which means "Only Work Shall Set You Free".
The boys began to frown at this.


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Also in memory of the approximately
11 million that died

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For those of you who don't know
Auschwitz
was the largest concentration camp and extermination camp

If you want to correct me on anything I was wrong about in the Holocaust
please correct me
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Ch.3-Work and Tragedy
The boys were inside Auschwitz.They saw that the soldiers were taking roll on the prisoners.Taking roll lasted hours.But the prisoners were grateful that it wasn't winter yet because they would have to stand outside to take roll no matter what.The women that were prisoners had their hair cut really short they were wearing their uniform which was a dress that was stripped blue and gray.Helena was among these women in the line.She was trembling,terrified that when the soldier would call her name that he would shoot her because she was a Polish Jew.Helena wanted to go back to her home even though she is in her home country of Poland she feels like that she is not home....This concentration isn't her home....The place she wanted to be right now is Sweden because the Swedish didn't surrender to Germany.Helena was lost in her thoughts....
Finally the soldiers were done taking roll and the prisoners were off to work.
The boys were finally assigned their jobs.They were assigned to watch the prisoners work.
Suddenly one of the soldiers went up to a women with a young child and they snatched the child away from her.It was a little girl.
"MAMA!"The little girl screamed in terror.
"Please don't take my daughter away from me"the woman begged as she was crying.
The soldier began to laugh and he shot the mother in the head.
Helena was watching this tragic moment as well as Bill,Tom,Georg,and Gustav were.Helena was trying to hold back the tears.
The little girl began to sob loudly.
"Take this one to the gas chambers!"The soldier
told one of the other soldiers.
The soldiers escorted the little girl.
The boys wanted to help the little girl and her mother but they were afraid of being killed.
This what just happened was normal in the concentration camp.
"This is so sad"Bill whispered to Tom.
"Ya I know"he whispered back.
"We need to find away to help them...."Bill said quietly.
"Wait here for a sec..."Bill said.
Bill began to walk up to Helena.
He tapped on her shoulder.
She turned around and looked at him in fear.
"Don't worry I wont hurt you"Bill said softly.




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Ch.4-Genuine Kindness
Helena looked at Bill.When she looked at him she didn't see a heartless man who had no feelings but what she saw was a caring gentle man with sorrow in his dark brown eyes.Helena thought that he was pretty handsome also.
"May I please have your name?"Bil asked gently.
"M-my name is He-helena"she stuttered.
Even though Helena had a feeling that he wasn't going to hurt her,she was still very vague.
"Like I said I wont hurt you
I just want to help you....."he said.
"How can y-you h-help m-me?"she asked.
"You are a Nazi soldier aren't you supposed to want to cause terror to the ones who aren't perfect or don't fit into the 'master race'
especially the Jews..."
"Helena that is what I'm supposed to do but I don't want to.....because that is wrong and cruel....People are people we are all equal no matter what."Bill replied.
"Yes you are right but Hitler doesn't think so...He hates Jews and he thinks that we should suffer....."she said quietly.
"Well I am NOT Hitler and I DON'T want to be part of the Nazi party but I have to or else I will be killed.But if I have to I will die just trying to help the people in this concentration camp."Bill said.
"I will help you Helena and the rest of the people in this camp..."
Helena smiled at him.
"You are a very kind man and you are not cruel like the other soldiers....I appreciate the kindness that you offer me..."she began to cry.
"Your kindness is very genuine it is like nothing I've ever felt before thank you"she said in between sobs.
"Please you don't thank me"Bill said.
'Helena is very beautiful' Bill thought.
He saw one of the soldiers approaching them.
"GET BACK TO WORK!"he yelled but he winked at Helena and she knew what he was doing.
So she went back to work.
And Bill walked back to Tom,Georg,and Gustav.



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Ch.5-Close to Death and Some Feelings
Helena was on her wooden bunk in her barrack,trying to take out some of the splinters she had on her stomach from laying on the hard wooden bunk.She knew if she didn't do this the splinters would go deep into her skin.and it would cause her to bleed internally.Helena was just thinking about everything...About the war...About her dead family....About how Bill said he was going to help the people in the concentration camp....And about Bill.She thought he was so cute and sweet.She knew that she couldn't any feelings for a Nazi....But she pushed away her thoughts of him and she fell asleep.

The soldiers were breaking into her barrack.They were yelling and the soldiers lined them up.One of the soldiers walked up to Helena.
"You theres something thats fishy about you..."
the soldier said harshly.
She began to tremble.
"Awwww look shes shaking"he began to make fun of her.
He pointed his gun a her head"you deserve to die".She saw Bill with the other soldiers which is Tom,Georg,and Gustav.
He began to walk up behind the soldier that had his gun pointed to Helena's head.
"Hey why don't we go back to the bar for some more drinks?"Bill said.
"Yeah I could go for another drink,lets go!"The soldier said.
'Thank you' Helena mouthed to Bill
He gave her a look that said your welcome.
The soldiers went back to the bar and the prisoners were free to go back into their barrack.

That night Bill and Helena couldn't stop thinking about each other.


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Ch.6-A Promise,a Good Deed,and a Kiss
Today in the camp the prisoners were digging wholes.Helena was next to her best friend Stella, she was Jewish as well and she was Polish.Stella used to have beautiful brown curly hair but now it was cut very short.Stella's brown eyes were focusing on the whole she was digging.
"Helena do you think we'll survive through this?"Stella asked as she was digging.
"I don't really know...Our treatment is getting worse by each passing day and the Nazis keep on coming up with different ways to torture us...."Helena replied.
"You're right but lets make a promise....It might sound odd but...If one of us survives this lets name one of our future grandchildren after each other.."
"Okay its a deal Stella"Helena began to smile.
"YOU TWO STOP TALKING DOWN THERE OR I WILL KILL YOU BOTH!"A soldier yelled coldly.
Hearing this both of the girls faces turned lifeless again.
'When is this ever going to end?And when it does end, will I be here to see the end of it?'Helena thought glumly.
Her stomach began to growl, she hasn't eaten in days....
But she continued with her so called "normal" day in the concentration camp.
It was night time once again she was laying in her bunk in her barrack but she was right next to her friend Stella.
"Boy do I miss my little brother...Even though he was annoying at times I still loved him..."
"Well be happy that he is safe with a nice family.Be happy for him that he is not here working every day doing meaning list tasks."
"Yeah I am Helena...."
There was a long silence between both of them.
"Helena you know how on the front it says 'Arbeit Macht Frei' well how come it says that?
Is work really going to set us free?"she asked.
"Stella I think that it means that work might keep us alive longer.....I don't think it will actually set us free......"Helena answered.
"Oh..."Stella said in a very quiet voice.
"We should get to bed..."Helena said.
"Yeah we should Helena...Good night..."
"Good night Stella."
Helena heard the door to her barrack open.But who she at the door was Bill,Tom,Georg.and Gustav.He had a few small pieces of bread in his hand.
And he gave it to the children but he told them not to tell anyone that they did this and the children swore not to tell anyone.Helena felt so touched by the heart-warming thing they're doing.Bill walked up to Helena's bunk.
"You're awake"Bill said.
"Yea I'm a very light sleeper..."she said.
"I see....."
Helena began to blush because his face was 2 inches away from hers.
"Well the men that are helping give out food are Tom,Georg,and Gustav....They wont do anything to hurt any of you..."Bill told her.
Helena kept on blushing.She could feel his breath hit her face as he spoke.Bill tripped and he accidentally kissed Helena.
Her eyes were wide.
"I'm so sorry Helena...I can be so clumsy"he apologized.
"I'm really sorry..."
"Its okay really no need to apologize when you are doing so much for me..."she said panicking.
"Well I should get out of here just in case the soldiers decide to bust in here or something....Sweet dreams Helena"he told her lovingly.He kissed her on the cheek, waved goodbye and he walked out of the barrack.
Bill left Helena as red as a tomato.
That night Helena couldn't stop thinking about Bill and how good that kiss felt.
Bill couldn't stop thinking about the kiss also.

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Ch.7-Beaten to a Bloody Pulp
Helena was digging going on with her so called "normal" day.
Helena was digging right next to Stella.
Out of no where a soldier came behind Helena and pulled her hair.He pushed her to the ground.
He was kicking her...Stepping on her stomach.Blood was coming out of her mouth.Tears were streaming from her eyes.'I hope that I could just die right now' Helena thought as the soldier was punching her face.He took out a knife and stabbed her.
Helena felt like screaming.She was in so much pain.
'I hope I could just die now so that I could be reunited with my family again.'
He continued with punching her face.Blood was coming out of her nose.
Bill was watching this in horror.
"Oh my god....."the boys whispered.
Helena's eyes began to swell up.Her lips were bleeding as well as her nose.
Her hands were shaking.
She was in pain.
Bill ran up to the SS officer.
"Stop beating her...Don't you think se has been through enough?!?!"
"WHAT!?!"the soldier said.
"I mean ummmm*cough cough*....Shouldn't we just leave her like this that way she could suffer more!"Bill said.Helena new that he was trying to save her...She could tell that Bill was trying to make up an excuse to save her.She hoped that the soldier would believe him that way he wouldn't get killed.
The soldier thought about it.
"I like the way you think!!"the soldier replied.
Before the soldier left he kicked dirt on her and as he walked away he said"GET BACK TO WORK OR YOU WILL BE KILLED!"
She was so grateful for what Bill just did.....'Bill is so brave....'she thought.Helena gathered up all her strength and she got up,picked up her shovel and got back to work.........
Stella gave look of sorrow.
Helena answered with a look that said 'Its going to be alright.'
And they got back to work.


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CH.8-Don't Worry I Promise You That We Wont Get Caught
Tears were coming out Helena's eyes.
Blood was still coming out of her wound,she was surprised that she was still alive.
Her face was swollen.Her eyes were black and blue.
Lips were red and swelled up.She had cuts and bruises all over her body.
Helena was lying in her bunk next to Stella.
"This is all we could get Helena"Stella rold her.Stella wet her cloth with the polluted water they had in the concentration camp and she put over Helena's wound.
Paula took hers and she wet and put it over Helena's forehead.
"Thank you..."Helena said.
"Don't worry its nothing Helena"Paula answered.
Stella nodded"Yeah."
A woman began to chant a Jewish prayer in Hebrew.Everyone in the barrack was listening to this prayer.Helena was listening to this prayer.
The prayer refreshed her soul.
She felt a warm feeling inside.
Her eyes began to shut,and she fell asleep to the woman chanting the Jewish prayer.

"Pssst Helena....Helena.."Bill whispered as he was shaking her.Helena's eyes fluttered open as she heard the voice call her name.
"Huh??Oh its only you Bill..."
"Come with me"he said.
He grabbed her hand and gently sneaked her out of her bunk.

He snuck her pass the soldiers and now they were in the room that he stayed in.
Bill was putting medicine on her wound.
"Were are you from?"he asked.
"I'm from here,Poland."
"Do you have any family in this concentration camp Helena?"
"No Bill....They all died....."
"I'm so sorry.Did I ask the wrong question?"
"Oh no its okay really!"
Bill heard foot steps heading towards his door.
"Helena get the bed QUICK!"he whispered.
Helena went under the bed,Bill quickly took the medicine and stuffed it into the drawer in his night table.
One of the soldiers walked in.
"Bill I just wanted to know were the female's voice was coming from."
"Ummm uhhhhh it was coming from.....me...Ummmm yeah thats right I was practicing a monologue!
Ever since I was a young boy I wanted to be a famous actor!"
"Oh....Okay then Bill."The soldier said in a tone that hinted that he was kind of freaked out.
"Good night"the soldier said.
He closed the door.
"You can come out now Helena."
"Wow...Thanks"she said.
"Few!.....That was a close one!"
"That was a very bizarre excuse Bill..."Helena said as she was getting on the bed
"Yeah I know..."
Bill began to put the medicine on her wound again.He put a bandage around Helena's stomach,over her wound.
There was an awkward silence.
He began to stare at Helena he moved his face close to hers, so close that their noses were touching.
He began to kiss her.
Helena wanted to push him away but it felt so good.She wanted to push him away because if someone walked into the room they both would be executed.He kissed her neck.She ran her fingers through his thick black hair.She finally came to her senses.
She pushed him away.
"I can't do this...If I am caught here with you
we both would be executed.."she began to cry.
Bill used his thumb to wipe the tears from her eyes"I promise you that we wont get caught....Please I love you Helena....."



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[luvtkaulitz4ever]

i love it! but...it happening too fast.....oh well, still love it

[ShadowIW]

what can I say?? ROCK ON!! THIS STORY ROCKS!

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okee so I read all of those chapters on the old site and I want mehr...bitter? :)

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Here you go....
Thought

Chapter.9-I Will Find a Way to See Her
"Bill I must go...I can't be seen here"Helena said as tears began to pour from her eyes."Okay Helena but I'm going to have to sneak you back though"Bill replied.He embraced Helen."I know that you feel like this is never going to end.But it will.And we will be able to be together one day even if it isn't now.Or maybe after we die....."Bill said as a tear rolled down his cheek.Helena wrested her head in the crook of his neck.She begna to so."Bill......I have to go.....back to the barrack"Helena said in between sobs."I understand...come on"and Bill lead her out of his room.He snuck her past the officers and she was back in her barrack.

Helena laid there staring at the wood that was hovering right above her supporting the people right above her.She wished that this was just a nightmare that would end soon.But it wasn't it was all real the pain was real,the suffering was real,and the sadness was real.She felt like she hasn't matured.She has developed physically but not mentally.All she has learned id that she was hated because of her beliefs.Helena felt like dieing.She couldn't even love because of the war.Because she was lower than everybody else.If she spoke up no one would hear her.If someone did they would probably kill her FOR speaking up.She still wondered why she wasn't killed.But she had to get to sleep.Because tomorrow she would have to wake up early.
Helena fell asleep...

WITH BILL!
Bill laid down staring at the ceiling.He felt like killing himself.He didn't even know if this was a dream anymore.Out of the blue Tom,Georg,and Gustav walked in.
"We kow you were with her.We don't want you to see her"Tom said.
"You're risking your life,what if you actually die in the waking world when you die in this world,the dream world..."Georg stated plainly.
"Ja.."Gustav said.
"I'm beginning to think that this is not a dream anymore.and we still have to help them though.I don't want to be a cold hearted murderer.I want to help them.I don't care if I die doing it."Bill said.
"We are going to help them, not fall in love with them.We're saying this because your feelings are putting yours and her life on the line"Tom said.Bill's eyes widened.Her life on the line Bill repeated in his mind."You can't see her anymore.We just want you to be safe"Gustav said and with that said Tom,Georg,and Gustav walked out of Bill's room.
I know that I haven't known her for a long time but I feel like I've known her all my life.I will find a way to see her.Even if it means putting my life on the line.


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lovin it! cant wait for the next chapter thingy.

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Oh YAY!!!!!, I was hoping you would post this story here. I like the way this story is coming about. Can't wait to read more.

Megan

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omfg! that was so good! >.< I wonder what happens next :shock:

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Here you go!
Thought

Chapter.10-Oh No!

[[Helena is dreaming/flashbacking]]
Helena was seperated from her mom ,her older sister,and her older brother.Sh was aone.She got through the showers and everything else they put her throug.But now she was worried about her mother and her siblings.She looked up at the sky it was as dull and gray as the smoke coming from the chimanies,it was as dull and gray as she was at the moment.Her face was paleAnd sadness and confusion filled her eyes.She walked up to one of the soldiers."Where is my mother and my sister?"She asked on the verge of tears.All the soldier did was lift up his hand to point at the chimanies.
And soon enough Helena found out that the chimanies led to the crematorium.

Helena woke up.With sweat on her forehead.Her body ached from the beating she got yesterday.But she had a feeling that today was going to be some what worse than what it was yesterday.

Helena was digging.Doing meaningless tasks such as movng giant rocks from one place to another.While she was digging a soldier pulled her by her hair."You are going to the gas chambers!"He yelled harsly into her ears.
"No.."Stella said quietly looking at Helena.
"Bill take this one to the gas chambers!"He screamed.
"Yes sir."Bill felt like dying.How am I ging to pull her out of this one?Bill thought.He began to cry but silently though as he walked Helena to the gas chambers.Helena was scared.She couldn't believe that now she was to face the last moments of her life.But she felt hapiness on the inside because she would be long gone and she wouldn't have to suffer anymore.They were finally there.Bill would rather kill himself first than kill her.
Helena had to strip down naked.

Bill looked at her pale face,into her a Hazel eyes."Helena I'm going to find a way to stop you from dying in there"he whispered to her quietly that way no one can hear him.She just nodded.And she walked into the gas chambers.She saw women and children huddling next to eachother screamn and crying.Everyone was so thin she thought that they would just die by using all their strangth from dcreaming and crying.Everyone looked so frail including herself.She looked up to see gas coming out.
BIll on the outside of the chambers heard the screaming get louder and all he could think was Oh no!


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Ch.11-
Helena began to cough and as she coughed blood spilled from her mouth.She knew this was it Bill wasn't going to save her.She knew that when she died she would be reunited with her family again when she died she would finally be at peace.Out of this crewl world.Out of this concentration camp.
Her breathing began to get heavier and more blood was coming out of her mouth.Everyone was screaming.Women and very small children were crying.There was one mother that was trying to comfort her child.Her coughing became harder and harder.

Bill was running trying to find away that he could stop the gas chambers or break it or someting.I can't lose her!Not like this! he thought.Bill saw a handle and he tried to pull it.But it was stuck.No this can't be!

Helena began to lie on the floor.She began to close her eyes.She thought that she was dying slowly.

Bill tryed to find a way to stop it.But no success.He was about to break down crying he didn't want her to die just like this.He saw the control panel.[[okay i dont reallt know how they controlled the gas chamber]]Then he looked at
his pistol that was in the holster clipped on to his pants.He took out his pistol and he shot the control panel.

Helena's eyes opened.She felt the gas stop coming out of the vents[].She heard the door to the gas chamber open.[i]Oh my god.He actually did it.She thought as she began to cry.When the gas chamber was completely open she saw Bill with another soldier standing in front of them telling them to get out.The people that were in the gas chambers were so happy that they weren't going to die.The soldiers made them put back on their clothes.And they had to get back to work.While walking away Helena looked at Bill.He stared at her back he was lost in her Hazel eyes.But she turned around and walked away with the rest of the people.


to be continued.....
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Remember if you feel uncomfortable with me writing this please tell me so or if you feel like I'm disrespecting you please tell me so because if it is I'll stop the fan fic.
Tell me if you like the fanfic and if you think I should keep on going....

[TanteMegs]

WOW!!!! Talk about suspense(sp?). That can not be good for one's heart, I know it wasn't for mine. :) Good job, keep it coming.

Megan

[cold_love]

wow I applaud you on your using a touchy subject for a fan fic (im serious not sarcastic) at first I was iffy about it when i read that it dealt with the holocaust, and because i have studied WW2 to a deep extent I was skeptical but from what you have used you have gotten right, including the inscription on the entrance, not many know about that, so kudos to you! very good story! keep it up!

[kArLa2tH]

dude u are mixing the topic in my Social Studies class with Tokio Hotel
this is AWSOME! please write more <3

[ShadowIW]

wowzers

[Izzylicous]

I made a mistake >.< the gas chambers had little tiny pellet things that fell down and once they hit the ground they would burst open and smoke would come out of them....

[Izzylicous]

im going 2 try my best 2 update its just that my internet goes out sometimes and its hard >.<....and i need ideas....if u wanna help AIM meat Izzylicous12....or u can yahoo me at izzyTRAGEDY....i will try my best...oh and lets c i wrote the next chapter but my internet doesnt work or im on a trip or my step sis is hogging the comp u can just AIM me or yahoo me and ill write it 2 u and u can post it here :] thank you guys sooo much 4 reading and tell me if u guys have fanfics that u want me 2 read and comment :]