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schrei.in.die.nacht
May 12th, 2008, 11:37 PM
THESE ARE NOT TOKIO HOTEL REALATED
okay, so i like to write short stories. its very fun, and it keeps my mind from exploding. and i have multiple notebooks full of stories, so i though i'd share them with you guys. no one has ever read these before. its kind of a private thing i do on my own time, cause im kinda afraid of criticism from people who kno me in person.
REPEAT! THESE ARE NOT TOKIO HOTEL REALTED
although, i do listen to music while i write, and whatever song im listening to affects the story a lot, so TH inspired a few.

this one is really morbid.
i don’t usually write like this.
inspired by dont jump. i even used a couple of lines from dont jump.

What You’ve Done

She couldn’t stand to look at him. She couldn’t stand to look at her. Just knowing what he did, what he did with her. It was filthy. She couldn’t believe something like this could happen. Her perfect life was crumbling before her eyes, and she couldn’t do anything about it. She felt suffocated. She couldn’t breathe. There was a stabbing emotional pain on her heart. She ran. That’s all she could do. Run. Her senses were drowned. She couldn’t feel anything, not the cold air on her face, or the soft drizzling rain on her skin. These things she would normally stop to admire, she was now oblivious to. She ran all the way home. It was becoming dark outside, and the rain was gone, but the skies were still gray, and the wet streets glistened from earlier’s soft rainfall. More things she would have normally found beautiful. She couldn’t see them now. All she could see was her pain. Pain. It was blinding her. She wanted it gone. She ran up the steps of her apartment, past her belongings, past her sister, past her life that was no longer worth anything. It made her feel stupid. How could she think it was all so perfect? She ran up the stairs to the roof. She didn’t notice her following. She walked to the edge of the building and looked down at the glistening pavement. She saw the beauty she had ignored earlier. She wanted to be part of it.

She reached the roof and looked at her sister. Her smart, beautiful, talented sister. Standing on the edge of the roof, her hair blowing in the light wind. She had to say something, something to change her mind.
Don’t do it.
There’s nothing left of me. I have no reason to be here.
Don’t jump.
I’m lost. All I see is pain.
Just come down. Give it a chance.
She took a step closer to her sister, who took a step closer to the edge. She ran up to her sister.
Please don’t go like this.
Don’t let them forget what they did. Don’t let them forget me.
The last words she heard before she saw her sister fall from the edge.
No.
She heard screams from below. Screams that weren’t hers. There was a crowd at the bottom that had been silently begging the girl not to jump. The silence was useless.
She looked down at her sister’s body. Mangled and Broken. Now on the outside, the way she felt on the inside.
She was still beautiful.

I scream into the night for you, don’t make it true, Don’t jump…


♥ ♥ ♥

They lowered the casket into the ground. I saw him. I saw her. Why were they here? She wouldn’t want them here
You did this to her.
What?
I hope you know this was your fault.
He stared blankly.
I hope you don’t forget her. I hope you don’t forget what you did. She loved you. But that wasn’t enough for you.
He continued to stare at me.
I hope she lives in your nightmares forever. I hope you know you’re a worthless piece of **** and you don’t deserve a place on this earth.
This had nothing to do with me.
Leave. Youre not welcome here.

A week later there was breaking news.
A young man had hung himself yesterday. A suicide note was found.
It stated:
It was my fault
I couldn’t forget.
Hopes became realities.

I felt very pleased with myself, knowing my sister won’t be forgotten, and that she had her final bit of vicious payback that he deserved through me.
The eyes of the city counted her tears, and they will not be forgotten. Never.
For the first time since she jumped I felt myself smile. I know she is happy for what I did.
I know she is proud of me.



Oh my god. That is so freaking morbid and depressing I cant even believe I wrote it. If you took the time to read the whole thing, im sorry I put you through that. i was also experimenting with a new writing style, i hope it wasnt confusing.

LipsOfAnAngel
May 13th, 2008, 03:53 PM
no, i loved it. it was soo incredably(sp?) sad. i want to read more of your short stories.

schrei.in.die.nacht
May 13th, 2008, 04:30 PM
no, i loved it. it was soo incredably(sp?) sad. i want to read more of your short stories.

really? thanks!
i'll type more up tonight if i get a chance.

BlondPunk
May 13th, 2008, 04:42 PM
That was AWESOME!
:]]]]]]]
I want to hear more of your stories!!! :]
Cuz this one was AWESOME
Really.

schrei.in.die.nacht
May 13th, 2008, 05:29 PM
That was AWESOME!
:]]]]]]]
I want to hear more of your stories!!! :]
Cuz this one was AWESOME
Really.

thank you so much!
im glad some people think im a good writer.
cause thats like what i want to do for a job someday.

schrei.in.die.nacht
May 13th, 2008, 07:48 PM
i dont think anyone else likes it............

i knew it was too depressing.
*slaps self for writing depressing story*

D.C.Valentine
May 14th, 2008, 02:30 PM
Depressing is my forte. It was well done. Don't stop. I would like my fan fiction to take that turn. Right now it's just...weird.

-DCV-

schrei.in.die.nacht
May 14th, 2008, 06:37 PM
Depressing is my forte. It was well done. Don't stop. I would like my fan fiction to take that turn. Right now it's just...weird.

-DCV-

lol thanks.
ill hopefully have more up tonight.
this next one isnt very good though.

amandaaraujo
May 15th, 2008, 12:28 AM
WOW that was amazing...I loved it totally realistic and to think that this things happen everyday.

schrei.in.die.nacht
May 15th, 2008, 03:55 PM
WOW that was amazing...I loved it totally realistic and to think that this things happen everyday.

thanks. i didnt think it was very good cause i wrote it in like 45 minutes.

schrei.in.die.nacht
May 15th, 2008, 07:59 PM
this is an assignment i wrote for language arts. i wrote it in like 10 minutes and thats why it SUCKS.
we were supposed to write about an event in our life from the point of view of another person. and since my life is boring, i took something that me and my fiend used to do, and i turned it into this:

The River

Sedona and I walked down to the edge of the river. Our parents had told us not to go down there, but we didn’t listen. They said it was dangerous, but we didn’t think so. We dropped our bags on the sandy bank, and I pulled a rope out of mine. I climbed up into a tree to tie it to a branch so we could swing from it.
“Be careful Shelby !” My friend called up to me.
“I will!” I called back. I finished securing the rope, and climbed down from the tree. Sedona ran and grabbed the rope. She swung out over the water and let go with a splash. I followed her example. We just relaxed, enjoying the cool water. After a while we got tired, because there was a pretty strong current. It wasn’t to bad though.
We saw a large rock in the middle of the river about fifty feet from where we were swimming. We thought it would be a nice place to rest and relax. We let the current carry us to the rock. We climbed up onto it.
Right as we reached the top, Sedona lost her grip. She fell into the water, hitting her head on the way down. The current pulled her under.
And that’s how my best friend died. How could I tell my parents? Would I say “Hey Mom and Dad! Guess what! Sedona and I went swimming in that river that you told us not to go to, and she died, just like you said would happen!”
I don’t think so.
I’ll just run away, and lay low for a while. Yeah, that’s it. I’ll run away and be a hobo, or a lumberjack.
No, I’m totally kidding. No one died. We just had a fun day swimming in the river.

THAT WAS EVEN WORSE THAN THE LAST ONE.

it was alright considering i wrote it in 10 minutes though...

but i still hate it.

BorisKLuca
May 19th, 2008, 07:40 PM
She saw the beauty she had ignored earlier. She wanted to be part of it.

I really like this quote alot, I like the first story alot alot, very animalistic, the way I think humans are sometimes.

The second story made me laugh, because it's something I would think in my head.
Like sometimes when I'm with my friends I'm like "what if someone got hurt right now?" not because we usually get hurt but because whenever I'm doing something I'm not suppose to do something always goes wrong.

I like.
You should write some more, please.

schrei.in.die.nacht
May 19th, 2008, 07:49 PM
She saw the beauty she had ignored earlier. She wanted to be part of it.

I really like this quote alot, I like the first story alot alot, very animalistic, the way I think humans are sometimes.

The second story made me laugh, because it's something I would think in my head.
Like sometimes when I'm with my friends I'm like "what if someone got hurt right now?" not because we usually get hurt but because whenever I'm doing something I'm not suppose to do something always goes wrong.

I like.
You should write some more, please.

thanks. i think if i get around to typing tonight, ill have another story up soon.

ix3zebrazz
May 19th, 2008, 08:29 PM
courtneyy loves sedonii's stories lmao member in pe " no its spelt sedone" and im like that looks like se-done. it looks wayyy cooler with two i's lmao funn times!!!!!!! guess what sedon-ii looks even coooooler hehehehheTHESE ARE NOT TOKIO HOTEL REALATED
okay, so i like to write short stories. its very fun, and it keeps my mind from exploding. and i have multiple notebooks full of stories, so i though i'd share them with you guys. no one has ever read these before. its kind of a private thing i do on my own time, cause im kinda afraid of criticism from people who kno me in person.
REPEAT! THESE ARE NOT TOKIO HOTEL REALTED
although, i do listen to music while i write, and whatever song im listening to affects the story a lot, so TH inspired a few.

this one is really morbid.
i don’t usually write like this.
inspired by dont jump. i even used a couple of lines from dont jump.

What You’ve Done

She couldn’t stand to look at him. She couldn’t stand to look at her. Just knowing what he did, what he did with her. It was filthy. She couldn’t believe something like this could happen. Her perfect life was crumbling before her eyes, and she couldn’t do anything about it. She felt suffocated. She couldn’t breathe. There was a stabbing emotional pain on her heart. She ran. That’s all she could do. Run. Her senses were drowned. She couldn’t feel anything, not the cold air on her face, or the soft drizzling rain on her skin. These things she would normally stop to admire, she was now oblivious to. She ran all the way home. It was becoming dark outside, and the rain was gone, but the skies were still gray, and the wet streets glistened from earlier’s soft rainfall. More things she would have normally found beautiful. She couldn’t see them now. All she could see was her pain. Pain. It was blinding her. She wanted it gone. She ran up the steps of her apartment, past her belongings, past her sister, past her life that was no longer worth anything. It made her feel stupid. How could she think it was all so perfect? She ran up the stairs to the roof. She didn’t notice her following. She walked to the edge of the building and looked down at the glistening pavement. She saw the beauty she had ignored earlier. She wanted to be part of it.

She reached the roof and looked at her sister. Her smart, beautiful, talented sister. Standing on the edge of the roof, her hair blowing in the light wind. She had to say something, something to change her mind.
Don’t do it.
There’s nothing left of me. I have no reason to be here.
Don’t jump.
I’m lost. All I see is pain.
Just come down. Give it a chance.
She took a step closer to her sister, who took a step closer to the edge. She ran up to her sister.
Please don’t go like this.
Don’t let them forget what they did. Don’t let them forget me.
The last words she heard before she saw her sister fall from the edge.
No.
She heard screams from below. Screams that weren’t hers. There was a crowd at the bottom that had been silently begging the girl not to jump. The silence was useless.
She looked down at her sister’s body. Mangled and Broken. Now on the outside, the way she felt on the inside.
She was still beautiful.

I scream into the night for you, don’t make it true, Don’t jump…


♥ ♥ ♥

They lowered the casket into the ground. I saw him. I saw her. Why were they here? She wouldn’t want them here
You did this to her.
What?
I hope you know this was your fault.
He stared blankly.
I hope you don’t forget her. I hope you don’t forget what you did. She loved you. But that wasn’t enough for you.
He continued to stare at me.
I hope she lives in your nightmares forever. I hope you know you’re a worthless piece of **** and you don’t deserve a place on this earth.
This had nothing to do with me.
Leave. Youre not welcome here.

A week later there was breaking news.
A young man had hung himself yesterday. A suicide note was found.
It stated:
It was my fault
I couldn’t forget.
Hopes became realities.

I felt very pleased with myself, knowing my sister won’t be forgotten, and that she had her final bit of vicious payback that he deserved through me.
The eyes of the city counted her tears, and they will not be forgotten. Never.
For the first time since she jumped I felt myself smile. I know she is happy for what I did.
I know she is proud of me.



Oh my god. That is so freaking morbid and depressing I cant even believe I wrote it. If you took the time to read the whole thing, im sorry I put you through that. i was also experimenting with a new writing style, i hope it wasnt confusing.

drummergirl24
May 19th, 2008, 09:01 PM
Wow. I really loved the first one, it had an excellent perspective for the girl who jumped. I can understand the pain the sister is feeling, it is hard to lose a loved one. Really great job, the second one made me laugh! Keep going, you have talent

LipsOfAnAngel
May 19th, 2008, 09:17 PM
for a second i was like 'omg she died!' that was great! mehr bitte!

schrei.in.die.nacht
May 19th, 2008, 10:21 PM
Wow. I really loved the first one, it had an excellent perspective for the girl who jumped. I can understand the pain the sister is feeling, it is hard to lose a loved one. Really great job, the second one made me laugh! Keep going, you have talent

lol thanks.

schrei.in.die.nacht
May 19th, 2008, 10:22 PM
for a second i was like 'omg she died!' that was great! mehr bitte!

one of my friends though that too when she read it.


and @ courtney: youre a loser. lmao. but i still love you.

berthaxoxo
May 20th, 2008, 08:03 PM
I like it, it's really good!!
Love the first one I laughed with the second one
You should totally keep writing!!
Good Job